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Part 1: Accounts of the beginning of life (first era)
1.1: An account of the first elementals and their work

In past times, when the worlds were still young, and the stars only shone out of vanity, an accident occurred. Two stars, both shining with a warm and tender light, saw that their light made life impossible on a nearby planet. Vain as both stars were neither wanted to lessen their powers. And so there was a struggle between the two stars; a struggle about which one could shine the prettiest. During this struggle something happened that was absolutely and utmost forbidden: The stars collided. The universe shook and trembled. Out of fright planets shot out of their orbits. In the chaos nebulas and disturbances in time and space appeared and disappeared. The universe was blinded by a bright light, to suffocate in total darkness afterwards.
Slowly but surely stars started to shine again with a careful light. Nothing would be the same however. From now on stars shone without caring about the others, afraid that a similar accident, a catastrophe, would happen again.
One part of the infinite universe would forever remain in darkness as a memory of the accident. This was the part where the accident had occurred. However, the planet that was the cause of it all had, against all the odds, survived the accident. It was doomed to live in absolute darkness for eternity, with but a few stars in the heavens that were but faintly visible.
The planet became a victim because of a simple wish; the possibility to carry life on her grounds, though her skies, and in her waters. This wish no longer had any future anymore until, at an exceptionally bright moment – of course there was no day and night on a planet without a star – a bright light shone in the heavens. Brighter and brighter the light shone as it became larger and larger. I still took quite a while, a time which could later be expressed as multiple years, before the light would arrive at the planet. In the mean time the light continued to become brighter and larger.
After the time which would later be expressed as multiple years had passed, the light finally arrived in the shape of a male human. The planet, which had not only suffered from loneliness, but cold as well during the time of darkness, noticed that this being also radiated with pleasant warmth. The creature looked around and saw de cold and desolate wilderness and a tear escaped his golden eyes. He cast up his eyes, not to the faint shining dots of light of the faraway stars, his home, but to the cold, dark emptiness between it and said:
"Hear me Nocta, elemental of total darkness, I Solum, elemental of bright light, born when the universe was blinded by a bight light, have returned to restore the light, but, in order to not completely destroy your habitat, I ask for your help to bring balance between light and darkness."
Nocta, her body barely visible against the darkness, observed the newcomer and replied:
"Solum, elemental of bright light, I Nocta, elemental of total darkness, born when the universe was suffocated by total darkness, agree to bring balance between light and darkness, so we shall not go down in history as enemies, but as friends, and vanity shall not bring harm to the universe again."
And so it came to pass that the essences of light and darkness worked together on a new beginning. Solum gathered his powers and created a star in the heaven above the planet, and ordered it to bring days. Nocta gathered her powers and created a moon in the heavens above the planet, and ordered it to watch over the nights. Even though the sun brought light in the darkness via the moon there would also be days when the moon would block out the light of the sun. And so there was a balance between light and darkness.
Exhausted from their exertions Solum and Nocta collapsed to the now habitable planet. There work was not done yet however. The planet was now habitable, but there was no life yet. So both stood up again, gave each other their hand and said:
"Hear us Viva, elemental of blooming life, we Solum, elemental of bright light, and Nocta, elemental of total darkness, have gone before you to make life possible on this world, but, to complete our work, you must come and bring it."
By way of an answer the joined hands glowed for a moment and the first form of life appeared at their feet. A small plant, the start of a tree, arose from the now fertile earth. The plant grew and grew until it was a mighty tree. The bark cracked open and a young woman, barely visible due to her likeness to the tree, stepped out and took her first breath. Viva, elemental of blooming life, looked around, and allowed the warm rays of her father's work to give her energy as she ordered plants to grow. During the night she rested under her mother's watchful eye and the moon. Soon there were forests, sees and desolate desserts; mountains, plains and cold poles. Every piece of the planet contributed to the balance that was necessary to continue to exist.
Last were the animals to appear. Viva ordered birds to fly and fish to swim. A wide variety of animals ran on land and through the forests. She gave them the fire of love and passion, so they would not have the bear the pain of immortal life, but could bring forth offspring to share the suffering. Viva also created man to watch over all the creatures.
When her work was done Viva too collapsed in exhaustion. The three elementals knew that their work would only be temporary. Their powers had limits, and as soon as it ran out the planet would slowly but surely die. The deep bond the three elementals shared gave them strength. Enough strength to return to the tree Viva was born from, but which was now being surrounded by a pond in an open spot within the first forest Viva had created. Hand in hand they stood around the tree. Slowly the three and the tree merged into the Tree of Life, creating an endless source of light, darkness and life, and thus securing the future of the planet and their work.
I bet you never expected to see this ;).

This is the very first part of my story 'elementals'. Together with part 1.2 is elapses the first era and acts as a prologue to the main story.

The original story is in Dutch and can be found at my site:
www.wafe-elementals.webs.com
This English version has the purpose to receive some more comments on through :iconglimpseoi:

I won't translate the entire story yet, but some scenes here and there. Enjoy is as much as you can =P.

Elementals is copyright to Acrocat, and guess who that is ;).
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junewralley May 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're right ^^. Like me, your writing style is simple and easy to understand. I just don't see why we have to put lot's of flowery words just to make our work sound pretty as other deviants say, especially those who need more visual stimulation. But then again, we can't please everyone.

Name-wise: Nocta, Solum and Viva sound really great. And I like the whole idea behind the shining stars.

Grammar-wise: I just noticed some typos wherein you used there instead of their, but aside from that, the rest is good.

Sorry it took me this long to critique. T.T

I'm looking forward to hearing from you and reading more of your work.
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Acrocat May 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey thanks ^^!

I have a thing with names. For the later parts all the elementals have a name that has something to do with the element they represent (for example Are (air), Flam (fire), Faero (air+fire) etc.).

There are bound to be more mistakes in it. I quickly translated it from Dutch, so I didn't really take a critical look at it when I was done ^^;.

Thanks for the belated comment :hug:
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junewralley May 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome Acrocat
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junewralley Feb 3, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Stars, planets, a whole new universe -woohoo!

This is definitely a great storyline for the fantasy genre...

Plus the fact that you can write in Dutch AND in English, makes you one heck of a writer
-one that deserves to be heard.

Last thing for this comment,
I can sense that your story has lots of heart...
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Acrocat Feb 3, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! The writing progress is going slow, but the plot is all finished, so I can continue with it whenever I want to.

Funny thing is some parts are easier in Dutch and others in English...but Dutch remains to be easier so far. That's why the original is in Dutch :).
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kittyocean Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
W00t! English! And you missed a </u> at the beginning XD Everything is underlined now XP
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Acrocat Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Really? I'm going to fix that right now, thanks!
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kittyocean Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You surely uploaded a lot =D Don't upload too much; give people a reason to go to your website and DA gallery ;)
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Acrocat Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Just added my gallery's art to the group, but thanks for the tip!
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kittyocean Jan 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I noticed how in some groups, people upload EVERYTHING to the group as well. When I go to their page, I see nothing different... so why should I visit their DA then?
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